Media ‘to do list’.
– Check through my Thriller opening to cut out any shots that are shaky or unneeded.
– Remove or shorten any shots that are unnecessarily long.
– Cut down the amount of footage so that the film complies with the designated film length constraints (i.e. 2mins max).
– Add in the remaining credits suitable for the opening.
– See if altering the brightness/light of the first shots is a possibility as the change in lighting through the ‘three minutes’ is noticeably drastic and abrupt. Another possibility would be having a black and white opening; however I would prefer to use this as a last resort.
– See if the pace of the opening can be increased by introducing more ‘quick cuts’ rather than using long drawn out shots. (This also helps me cut down the time of the opening).
– The audience response shows that my narrative was clear so I will do my best not to compromise that factor; however the pace needs to be quickened.
– The framing for some of the shots is off centred, so I will need to crop some of them to resolve this.
– Play around with the sound and remove any unneeded background noise i.e. voices.
– Check for the moments where I break the 180 rule and remove these shots.
Reflection (1st Edit).
I think overall, I’ve managed to film and create a relatively acceptable first edit. However I have gained a vast amount of advice and possible improvements from my audience responses; which I will of course act upon and bear in the fore front of my mind when creating the 2nd Edit of my opening. When making the 2nd Edit I intend to cut down the length as sticking to the designated time/length constraints is a vital aspect of the filming process.
Media: reflection.
Media ‘to do list’. (2nd edit).
– Once again check through my Thriller opening to cut out any shots that are shaky or unneeded. (As my audience have noted, I’ve failed to remove every shaky shot).
– Shorten any shots that are unnecessarily long or similarly shots that can be cut down.
– Cut down the amount of footage so that the film complies with the designated film length constraints (i.e. 2mins max).
– See if altering the brightness/light of the first shots is a possibility as the change in lighting through the ‘three minutes’ is noticeably drastic and abrupt.
– See if the pace can be increased further.
– The framing for some of the shots is off centered, so I will need to crop some of them to resolve this.
– Check for the moments where I break the 180 rule and remove these shots.
Reflection (2nd Edit).
The second edit is a vast improvement in comparison to the first. The pace has been quickened and I think this makes it look more effective. The sound is vastly improved, and to the most part, fits the sequence. The abrupt nature of the light transition between the initial shots and closing shots is still noticeable so I will need to filter the closing shots to reduce this.
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Overall I thought there were good aspects of camera work and the acting in most places came across very well. Some of the facial close ups were good and caught the mood. As the title suggests the main dude is well and truly deceived by his operatives. As a first edit goes the film has promise and i believe the final edit will portray this film in good light. As for negatives a bit bitty in the middle when the guy is being followed passed the cars parked on the side. I think the film requires editing from when the first guy wallks around the corner to the part when he is put down. This is the area where it comes across bitty.
I think it is good. I think that you brake the 180′ rule at the end. The plot is quite clear and relatively easy to understand which is good. The change in lighting is quite abrupt, but I am not sure what you could do about that. There are places where the framing is slightly off, so maybe you should try to crop the frame slightly. The opening is quite long and I think that it might be worth cutting down some of the longer duration shots. Overall I am impressed.
At 0.2 the camera shakes at the end, simple cut will sort that out. At 0.6 the camera moves when not ment too, also i think it would be good to add a close up of the letter going into the pocket, becuase this shot is all one long shot. The mans head is also not in the shot? Is it ment to be like that? Could have a close up on him closing the boot? 0.18 Again all one long shot, get closer to the man so we can see what he looks like. Is him looking on the phone an important part of this, is it telling him something? Again all one long shot. Camera is very shaky when getting to the end of the shot. 0.32 ALL ONE SHOT AGAIN. more close ups! Could have a close up on him zipping his coat? 0.40 lighting change. Aslo shaky at the end of the shot. 0.57 sound of button? and shaky. 1.30 camera is shaky on close up of his face. Any reason why we are looking up at him? 1.42 break 180 degree rule. 2.06 you can see the other two men? when the shot changes to the next one you can see that they are not in a line so they should be seen? 2.13 camera shake. 2.17 camera shake. 2.20 he steps twice, then in the next shot he does the same again. 2.50 DEFFO NEED A CLOSE UP OF HIS FACE GETTING OVERD. 2.54 you dont see other man walk over to get his legs he just magically appears there? Close ups of him getting put in boot needed. love shot 3.20 however it is too long.
Over all it is good. I think you need to add more shot in a differnt lenghts and angles becuase it is all filmed in long shot. You need to re-film shots why are shaky or cut them down so it dosent shake. I persoanlly think the walking but it too long and if you stop becuase you feel someone is following you surely you would look behind to see them? Have maybe the man who hid behind the wall texting the other guy to show their link and relationship?
Overall it is a good first edit 🙂
Good first edit 😛 however you have quite a few shakey shots and obviously need to cut the parts out where you can hear you talking. I think personally it’s all rather slow and needs to speed up a bit and also I don’t like the shots where it keeps cutting when they guy is foloowing the other as changes from the both in shot to one then again later see them both in shot. I think the shot when the gun is behind the guys back can be cut down. Also maybe have some speech? feels like it’s missing something. Also it gets dark very quicklyyyy… so maybe see if something can be done to lighter shots so its not such a big change. I think you have a good narrative but does neeed to be sped up 😛 Well done though 🙂
Like the first edit ! The sequence seems to stand up without sound so will be good to see the finished edit & how more dramatic you can make it feel which I think will certainly make it appear more joined up. Some good points raised but for the first attempt quite impressed ! Looking forward to seeing the final cut.
2nd edit: Right it’s alot better from the first edit! Makes a lot more sense and it’s better as its got better pace to it. You have quite a few shakey shots which are very noticeable so they need to be sorted also I feel the music needs to start sooner and also gets a bit too repetitive as it goes along so maybe either add another sound in or change the sound sequence. I think it suits your opening well but maybe when it gets a bit louder is too much so experiment with another sound to see what happens. I think with the filter it helps to hide the light changes which is really good. So well done 🙂 x
2nd Edit: I think this is a huge improvement on the first edit. The music is very fitting, synced well and overall gave the opening a more thrilling feeling. I also noticed that you cut down a lot of the clips, and took a few out which I thought was a wise choice, as it does not seem to drag on as much as your 1st. However, I think some shots were too long, and some were a little too short etc. so I think you need to go back and improve on cut length in some places. For examples, at 0:50 seconds, I noticed that you changed a lot of that since your last edit, and I think that you cut out (what I thought) was a very good shot. I would consider replacing it, and tweaking the length of the sequence at that point. I also think that the black and white does not suit it entirely, and I would much rather see a more gloomy and threatening colour correction. However, this is my own opinion, and I am sure you and a lot of your other audiences will have their preferences as well. Overall I think it is coming along well.
2nd edit, huge improvement, the pace is good, gives a dramatic feel. I think you can still get under the two minutes, one criticism is the music does get louder and started to distract my viewing from the film. Overall a really good second edit, a few tweaks required see other comments. Overall Josh a really good second edit, looking forward to third edit.
2nd Edit: As you know, I am not a big fan of the music, though it works better than I thought it would. It doesn’t feel as unnecessarily long as your first edit did, however it is still quite long and some shots would be better cut down or cut out all together. I am not sure if the black and white entirely works, as I think it it looks good at the beginning but isn’t as effective at the end when it is quite hard to make out the details of your characters/setting. Overall, I am impressed. Well done!
I think you need some music right from the start becuase its too quite. 0.4 the camera moves. Still think you need close up on 0.29 when he is putting his phone into his pocket. 0.36 you dont need him waking all the way off the camera it isnt nessesary, cut it down. at 0.53 your actor smirks which gives the imrpression that he knows he is there ect, it is confusing to the veiwers.0.55 dont keep the camer on the other man too long, cut to the hand quicker. 1.05 you break the 180 degree rule! 1.07 to gun in hands dont make the man standing there so long, have it a qucik shots and maybe some music to show the danger of him over the one which is already playing? 1.47 the man jumps right into position need him walking there.1.53 180 degree rule broken again. 2.10 cut down the boot shot is is too long. 2.15 180 degree rule broken again. 2.35 your actor turns around to see if you where done. Other than that so much better than your first edit well done! 🙂
Good 3rd edit 😛 The sound really makes a difference however there are some shakey shots here and there which need to be sorted also there seems to be a very repetative shot of the close-up of the faces…. so is there anything else you can put in?? Also the shot at 0.31 seems to be just randomly put in and doesn’t seem believeable as you can tell that he is in the shot alone and walks when you tell him too as the shot is empty compared to the shot before when he seems to be right behind the other guy. The shot at 0.43 needs to be cut down at the beginning and also maybe change the placement of the shot before to after this shot as then you have seperated all those close-ups? Also the shot at 1.05 needs to be cut at the end as like the guy goes down but then it looks like they are waiting and aren’t actually doing anything. Also last thing, your last shot needs to be cut down slightly as it feels a bit long…. but part from that well done 😛 i think the placement of the titles are done really well 🙂